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  • Grace Woods
    December 29, 2022 at 3:42 pm

    This was a really cute story! First off, I liked how unique of a monster Aspen is. Her backstory reminded me of Bambi (like what would happen if he decided, instead of overseeing the woods, that he wanted to terrorize humans?) I liked how, though the death of her mother was described with plenty of tragic details, the ending message wasn’t that humans are cruel intruders and should be stopped. It was that Aspen needed to let go of her resentment and start over.
    One thing I struggled with was how Benny had to disobey his dad in order to hug her (a potentially dangerous creature) in the first place (it makes him seem like a hero for risking his life and disobeying his dad, meanwhile his dad seems like a weakling for not taking better care of his son). This, of course, is just my impression.
    My favorite moment, though, was when Benny stroked Aspen and told her she was pretty and soft. I mean, NO ONE probably told the scary antelope that before. And it made her heart melt, which was really sweet.
    Keep up the good writing!

    • Eleanor Kraft
      December 29, 2022 at 5:36 pm

      Thank you for your feedback! I’m glad you enjoyed my story!

  • Citlalin Ossio
    January 20, 2023 at 11:56 am

    Oh my gosh, this story is so cute! Thank you for submitting! I’m sorry it’s taken me so long to read it, but I really enjoyed it.
    I was immediately pulled into the story with your lovely description of the forest. It was vivid! Then getting that glimpse of Aspen’s joy being with her mom makes the tragedy hurt more later. My heart. You also expressed Aspen’s rage very well throughout so it was easy to relate to her and it makes her feel more real. Who could blame her for resenting?
    And oh my gosh, Benny. He is too cute and the perfect person to help Aspen heal. I loved their scene together.
    In fact I loved it so much I wanted more glimpses of Aspen’s continued healing through their growing friendship. I’m also curious how their farewell went and was a little surprised Benny didn’t go with his dad to set Aspen free.
    Thank you again for submitting Eleanor! This is a great story with so much heart and a lovely theme.

    • Eleanor Kraft
      January 23, 2023 at 3:05 pm

      Thanks for your feedback! Good to hear that you liked my story 🙂

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